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I came up with this while stuck at home during our state's shelter in place period. Minor issues in the playing but it's the best recording I have. It's an upbeat, ragtime, kinda thing. I don't really know how to categorize it. I just found that first phrase and kept building. I really enjoyed this process and I'm going to keep trying to come up with things. I've never been a "creative" person, more analytical. It is extremely gratifying but also time consuming, so I have to now carve out composition time, which is different in mindset than my normal "get better at piano" practice. I have to find ways to get in this more contemplative / creative headspace rather than my normal "let's do this, knock out the to do list" headspace.

I'm absolutely open to expert feedback on this. I appreciate your consideration.

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Thanks for sharing your composition and well-done!
You have written a nice little piece here. I find it quite joyful and pleasant to listen. Like a nice walk under the spring sunshine along a clear river.

You talk about mindset, and I agree that it is not totally the same to create music than to do piano workouts wink

You have to let your imagination work.
But it is also hard systematic work. Your analytical mind will certainly be helpful to grow your composition skills.
In particular, if you take the habit of analyzing other piano pieces (or music in general). It will teach you a lot about composition and help you with yours.


From this video, I think that there is still some work on the execution itself.
I find it a bit "rigid" in the playing.
Maybe try to relax and sing the melody to help you find a better "flow".
And of course, by playing it regularly, you will improve a lot!

On the composition itself, I am not expert enough for now to give more advice, but there are people around who certainly can dive into the analysis of your song.


Keep going!


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Good job! It could definitely become an ear worm—-which is a good thing 😊


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I have a few thoughts, but I'm not an expert, not sure what you're looking for according to that word...

I liked the melody very much. It's charming. I do think the tune could benefit from a few things, though. One, I think you need to increase the tempo a little bit. Not a huge amount, maybe between 5-15 bpm. But I think that because it's got a nice kind of swing and upbeat feel to it, having it played so slowly makes it drag a bit.

I also think the recording was kind of lacking, so something gets lost. Seemed like a standard phone mic. It's fine to get the point across, but it's just not the same as being in the room or having a nice mic.

Some added flourishes might be nice as well. Just tiny variations on parts you repeat a few times, like the descending, punctuated 3-notes you occasionally do, would help. I think the way it sounds right now makes it feel more like a simplified version of a really good piano song, perhaps something you'd play in a beginner's piano book. That's not an insult. As I said, the melody is good, you're just missing a bit of flair.

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I love it! And I'm rarely so exuberant about a composition ... mainly because so many are written with electronic Apps and are totally impossible for ordinary non-cyber fingers to play. It's a joy to see someone at the piano actually playing his own work. And it's a terrific bit of ragtime which has my toes tapping and hands waving around.

That being said, there is often a problem when one's composition skills are ahead of their "performance" skills. I often spend more time practicing a piece for YouTube than I do actually composing it. I joke about this rather wryly since I have a fairly weighty background in performance and like to think I'm writing "accessible" music. Not so. My last piece took me three months to record ... crazy

Your playing is fine ... but you need a big dollop of "charisma". Speed it up a bit ... get into that wonderful ragtime beat. Exaggerate and "perform". Years ago I encountered Lang Lang after many years performing in a very strict "Rubinstein" style. I was simultaneously horrified and dumbfounded by this wonderful musician's gyrations. But he transformed my style ... and brought out a spirit I'd never dared to display at the keys. Which I gleefully transferred to my students

"Just Lang Lang it" I'd howl at a student when their playing seemed lackluster. "Loosen up ... Feel the beats ... come ON! You're not a robot!" Sometimes I'd sit down and produce a performance which would have induced heart failure in my teachers years ago. (Check out "Just Lang Lang It" on my teaching blog ... it will probably give you a chuckle!)

You've written a terrific piece ... now relax and enjoy it! Feel the beats ... let the tempo breath ...

And maybe consider writing the score so people like me can enjoy it too. MuseScore offers a wonderfully accessible site for composers to write their own works. You get an excellent pdf file which you can share on a blog or even on YouTube. Consider posting this clip on YouTube too! Get it out there! It's good ... ( Don't worry about copyright ... most people don't realize that the moment you publish publicly in any way, your rights are protected)

I'm itching to try it!

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I like this a lot! Kind of like a laid back ragtime. Definitely keep composing.


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