Welcome to the Piano World Piano Forums
Over 2.5 million posts about pianos, digital pianos, and all types of keyboard instruments
Join the World's Largest Community of Piano Lovers (it's free)
It's Fun to Play the Piano ... Please Pass It On!

SEARCH
Piano Forums & Piano World
What's Hot!!
Posting Pictures on the Forums
-------------------
Forums RULES & HELP
-------------------
ADVERTISE on Piano World
(ad)
Piano Tuning
How to Tune Pianos
(125ad)
Piano Life Saver - Dampp Chaser
Dampp Chaser Piano Life Saver
(ad)
Piano Buyer Guide
Piano Buyer Spring 2017
(ad)
4th Finger Enigma Resolved!
Schumann's 4th Finger Enigma Resolved!
Who's Online Now
48 registered members (AZNpiano, Agent88, accordeur, AccidentalDavid, AndyP, 9 invisible), 789 guests, and 2 spiders.
Key: Admin, Global Mod, Mod
(ad)
Estonia Pianos
Estonia Pianos
Quick Links to Useful Piano & Music Resources
Our Classified Ads
Find Piano Professionals-

*Piano Dealers - Piano Stores
*Piano Tuners
*Piano Teachers
*Piano Movers
*Piano Restorations
*Piano Manufacturers

Quick Links:
*Advertise On Piano World
*Free Piano Newsletter
*Online Piano Recitals
*Piano Recitals Index
*Piano & Music Accessories
*Live Piano Venues
*Music School Listings
* Buying a Piano
*Buying A Acoustic Piano
*Buying a Digital Piano
*Pianos for Sale
*Sell Your Piano
*How Old is My Piano?
*Directory/Site Map
*Virtual Piano
*Music Word Search
*Piano Videos
*Virtual Piano Chords & Scales
Previous Thread
Next Thread
Print Thread
#2010944 - 01/08/13 02:10 AM Moon's Cry  
Joined: Dec 2012
Posts: 5
SilverRedSouL Offline
Junior Member
SilverRedSouL  Offline
Junior Member

Joined: Dec 2012
Posts: 5
Hello everyone. Thought I'd share another of my composition again. Here's 'Moon's Cry'. Please do comment smile

https://soundcloud.com/silverredsoul/moons-cry

(ad)
Piano & Music Accessories
piano accessories music gifts tuning and moving equipment
#2011161 - 01/08/13 01:13 PM Re: Moon's Cry [Re: SilverRedSouL]  
Joined: Sep 2006
Posts: 1,124
rada Offline
1000 Post Club Member
rada  Offline
1000 Post Club Member

Joined: Sep 2006
Posts: 1,124
pagosa springs,co
Hello, I think you have a very nice melodic idea in this piece. Your left hand arpeggiation gets 'muddy' sounding when you get below C3 and are playing in thirds...that's not the best sound on the piano....also you offer some dissonance in this piece that is not convincing to my ear.

rada



#2011590 - 01/09/13 08:47 AM Re: Moon's Cry [Re: SilverRedSouL]  
Joined: Dec 2012
Posts: 5
SilverRedSouL Offline
Junior Member
SilverRedSouL  Offline
Junior Member

Joined: Dec 2012
Posts: 5
Hi rada. Thanks a lot for your advice! Appreciate it smile

#2012686 - 01/11/13 10:48 AM Re: Moon's Cry [Re: SilverRedSouL]  
Joined: Feb 2005
Posts: 3,290
Steve Chandler Offline
3000 Post Club Member
Steve Chandler  Offline
3000 Post Club Member

Joined: Feb 2005
Posts: 3,290
Urbandale, Iowa
Originally Posted by rada
also you offer some dissonance in this piece that is not convincing to my ear.

I hear what you mean by this but it just sounds like one finger hit two notes in one particular phrase. The fact that it was consistent leads me to wonder if it was a mistake. The first time is at :26 where he uses a chromatic tone that should be down a half step to stay diatonic. It happens again at 1:04 and it's the exact same phrase and again at 2:35. Silver if your harmony there is not of the augmented sixth variety then the lower note of that phrase leading to the next chord should be down a half step. To give an example the melody sounds like it goes Db to B to C. That's a very unnatural phrase that would happen only if your harmony used an augmented sixth chord (which it doesn't) so there is dissonance between the B and the rest of the chord sounding at that moment.

#2013196 - 01/12/13 03:58 AM Re: Moon's Cry [Re: Steve Chandler]  
Joined: Dec 2012
Posts: 5
SilverRedSouL Offline
Junior Member
SilverRedSouL  Offline
Junior Member

Joined: Dec 2012
Posts: 5
Originally Posted by Steve Chandler
I hear what you mean by this but it just sounds like one finger hit two notes in one particular phrase. The fact that it was consistent leads me to wonder if it was a mistake. The first time is at :26 where he uses a chromatic tone that should be down a half step to stay diatonic. It happens again at 1:04 and it's the exact same phrase and again at 2:35. Silver if your harmony there is not of the augmented sixth variety then the lower note of that phrase leading to the next chord should be down a half step. To give an example the melody sounds like it goes Db to B to C. That's a very unnatural phrase that would happen only if your harmony used an augmented sixth chord (which it doesn't) so there is dissonance between the B and the rest of the chord sounding at that moment.


Points taken. Thanks a lot Steve. I will look into my piece and see what I can do.

#2022238 - 01/27/13 04:05 PM Re: Moon's Cry [Re: SilverRedSouL]  
Joined: Sep 2012
Posts: 19
1wiki1 Offline
Junior Member
1wiki1  Offline
Junior Member

Joined: Sep 2012
Posts: 19
It sounds really good, but I would modify the "main phrase" even more, cause it sounds to me like a one never-ending piece with no "plot", no feeling. It´s just my opinion. But I think it still sounds really good! smile Keep composing! smile


Moderated by  Piano World 

Piano Acc. & Gift Items in
Piano World's Online Store
In PianoSupplies.com ,(a division of Piano World)
our online store for piano and music gifts and accessories, Digital Piano Dolly, party goods, tuning equipment, piano moving equipment, benches, lamps Caster Cups and more.


Free Shipping* on Jansen Artist Piano Benches, Cocoweb Piano Lamps, Hidrau Hydraulic Piano Benches
(*free shipping within contiguous U.S. only)
(ad)
Pearl River & Ritmuller
Ritmuller Pianos
(ad)
Pianoteq
PianoTeq 6 Out now
(ad)
Lindeblad Piano
Lindeblad Piano Restorations and sales
ad
Pierce Piano Atlas


New Topics - Multiple Forums
Piano recommendations needed
by flyfishinmusician. 10/18/17 01:09 AM
Thomas Bailey
by ClsscLib. 10/17/17 09:46 PM
Good Gig Bag for Roland RD700NX?
by ClsscLib. 10/17/17 09:26 PM
What piano brands that use high-quality actions.
by JDRPiano. 10/17/17 09:17 PM
Getting better at memorizing
by rov. 10/17/17 07:08 PM
Forum Statistics
Forums44
Topics182,354
Posts2,665,389
Members88,989
Most Online15,252
Mar 21st, 2010
(ad)
Accu-Tuner
Sanderson Accu-Tuner
Check It Out!
There's a lot more to Piano World than just the forums.
Click Here to
Explore The Rest of Piano World!!
Visit our online store for gifts for music lovers


 
Help keep the forums up and running with a donation, any amount is appreciated!
Or by becoming a Subscribing member! Thank-you.
Donate   Subscribe
 
Our Piano Related Classified Ads
| Dealers | Tuners | Lessons | Movers | Restorations | Pianos For Sale | Sell Your Piano |

Advertise on Piano World
| Subscribe | Piano World | PianoSupplies.com | Advertise on Piano World |
| |Contact | Privacy | Legal | About Us | Site Map | Free Newsletter |


copyright 1997 - 2017 Piano World ® all rights reserved
No part of this site may be reproduced without prior written permission
Powered by UBB.threads™ PHP Forum Software 7.6.0